I chose this journal entry to share for ELA because I always like to share personal things in my writing like stuff about my family.

One thing I did well in this journal entry is I included pictures and a video to get the reader’s interest.

One thing I could have done better is maybe ask the audience if they have events in their lives that are similar or maybe ask them what they think.  Then they might have more personal interest.

Here is a link to the original post for you to read.